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Tuesday 22 October 2019

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You never really know you’ve lost someone until you feel as if you’ve lost a part of yourself?

This happen in on my block when olivia and ruby got shoot because cesar was meant  to shoot someone in another gang but he couldn't shoot him so that person came to Olivia party to come and shoot cesar and ruby try save cesar and got himself shoot that kill Olivia`and thats when ruby lost a part of himself when he lost Olivia it was so hard for him to get over her death 
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  1. Anonymous24 October 2019 at 10:23

    Your first line hooks the reader and makes them think. Great.

    I'm looking forward to reading about what happens in the story. Is what happens in the story going to be connected to the idea developed in that first line?

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  2. Anonymous25 October 2019 at 14:13

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  3. Anonymous25 October 2019 at 14:14

    Great job.

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